vox nihili

Uh... I have one little suggestion, using an example not from your piece, but I think it will be effective. *agh! I broke the no ellipses resolution* "It isn't a ...

I am a pretty blunt if I say anything in my critique that seems abrupt or harsh, it's just my literal sense of humor playing through...I really just want to ...

I am very literal and brisk... I really don't want to sound too harsh, because so far as I've read, it's good, but down to business: *some of this will ...

This is the back-story to my character's trials which will eventually (if I ever get there!) come and bite her in the face, make her so shocked she won't know ...

I have a...pretty long ghost story...here it is: *it is long..* but I will beg humbly: please, please at least look at it. I think it's a pretty good attempt ...

I hope I don't sound too harsh, but here's my criticism: one: you really do the whole biography thing in the first few paragraphs. It's interesting but hard to keep ...

One of the groom's so-much-es needs to be put in italics. Other than that, it's a great, almost immaculate poem. So keep writing! I will let my readers go-- Cheers! ...

sorry.

This is an overview, for those of you who have been reading my poems. There is a Before _______ and an After _____ for me....this should clarify. Now I give ...

I will just second what everybody else said and slink off into cyberworld...... Yells: *I second their claims!* So that's my crit...sorry I wasn't more original, but they already said ...

First thing: Mona Leef sounds like...a Hawwiian volcano tree or something. Weird simmilie, eh? I love the first name, but it being so unusual, you desperately need a more commonplace ...

Urhm... I have no knowledge whatsoever on any sort of sonnetry. But I am an experienced poet. So here's my say: Your use of the colon after 'an interesting dilemma' ...

I like this poem. It says for the dying what we mourners are too sorrowful to realize. And it says it tactfully, too. I like that oh-so-simple-fact. But you have ...

When me legs gave out, I tried not to shout. There was an awful tension, And I knew there would be no pension But a debt in Hell to pay. ...

The last sentence in the last paragraph doesn't make any sense. Read it yourself. "That's cause is a miles-high tall." or "That is cause is a miles high tall." Please, ...